A07- Bigfoot9

What does culture mean to a person? Is it a good thing to experience other cultures? Does culture have the ability to actually destroy another culture? Citizens of any nations are alays constantly trying to indulge in other cultures. Americans are spending thousands of dollars every year flying to a vast number of countries to spend time in other countries and citizens in other countries are flying to the United States, which this is no problem, this is experiencing culture at free will. The problem nowadays is that the fast food chains of America are destroying cultures worldwide.

Culture has a uniquw characteristic about it. In that is is different from area to area of the world. Each place has a certain kind of food that they eat, drink, and their way of life. Most countries, before Fast Food companies took over, ate natural things and lived over all healthy lives. A recent health survey has stated that over 31.8% of US adults in the United States alone are clinically obese. Fast food chains have started to make other countries fat. Mexico now has a 31.8% of obesity. Fast Food chains have started to negatively influence the food that the world is consuming.

Not only is culture the type of food one consumes, but it is their way of life, like their daily routine and exercise. With the introduction of fast food in these nations, their way of life is being affected. With the rise of obesity rates in other nations, health is on the Adeline and health care is on the incline. A study shows that diabetes is on the rise and that in 2030, China is projected to grow from 90 million to 130 million. India is projected to have their number, 61 million, jump to 101 million. With the increase of people diagnosed with diabetes it means that the demand for the medication will only sky rocket. In the United States it costs anywhere from $8-$200 and some do not even have health insurance, so their costs would be even more. In other nations, such as Mexico, it costs the user 50% of the total cost.

America needs to realize how much damage their fast food chains are bringing to other nations and their culture. They are being a over bearing with their chains and need to understand that their “culture” is not natural and the damage will be done and nothing can be done in order to remove it.

Works Cited

“‘Globesity’: US Junk Food Industry Tips Global Scales.” RT English. N.p., n.d. Web. 26 Oct. 2015.

Pan, An, Vasanti Malik, and Frank B. Hu. “Exporting Diabetes to Asia: The Impact of Western-Style Fast Food.” Circulation. U.S. National Library of Medicine, n.d. Web. 26 Oct. 2015.

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3 Responses to A07- Bigfoot9

  1. bigfoot9 says:

    feedback was requested.

    Feedback provided.
    —DSH

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  2. davidbdale says:

    OK, bigfoot, let’s rock.

    P1. Any student who has listened to me casually will know how much I hate Rhetorical Questions, so you must be starting here with three of them deliberately to demonstrate to me how effective they can be.

    You think culture’s important, that experiencing other cultures is valuable, and that therefore retaining cultural differences is a positive global value. You don’t say so. Your reader has to say so in answering your rhetorical questions. You should say so.

    You do say that “Americans [fly] to a vast number of countries to spend time in other countries.” They’ll still be able to do so after fast food corporations have stripped all cultural differences from those countries. BUT THEY WON’T BOTHER to do so, is your premise, because there WILL BE NO REASON to travel anywhere for culture. We’ll all belong to one huge, global, McWorld! You could say that, instead of asking rhetorical questions. Just a suggestion.

    P2. bigfoot, I am not being uncharitable when I describe this paragraph as lazy and sloppy. I apologize for doing so in this somewhat public space, but you cannot permit yourself to say things like: “31.8% of US adults in the United States alone.” Neither can you ask us to believe that precisely the same percentage of Americans (31.8%) and Mexicans (31.8%) are obese.

    P3. What nations? The rest of the world? What daily routine? Health is on the “Adeline”? Health care is on the “incline”? China is projected to grow from 90 million to 130 million? Surely China is much bigger than that already. What costs $8? One pill? A daily dose? A year’s supply? 50% of the total cost of what? To speak bluntly, this paragraph would fail in a portfolio.

    P4. What has been defined?

    I apologize if this seemed harsh, bigfoot. I’ve been impressed with your commitment to other assignments. This one needs work before it can be considered a first draft.

    I would welcome your response.
    Reply, please.

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    • bigfoot9 says:

      oh no its not harsh, just blunt truth that is needed sometimes. I welcome feedback that makes me a stronger writer. Thank you for the feedback, I did not realize that i was messing up my percentages when referencing the obesity rates. I will continue to work on this until we must submit it, thank you again.

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