Proposal+5 – tpaz1

The death penalty is legal in many states today, leaving only a small number illegal. The death penalty is a form of legalized unusual punishment, which includes executions such as lethal injections, firing squad, electrocution, and gas chambers. Many people around the world protest against the death penalty in states its legal, like Texas, Utah, Georgia. People preach the death penalty eliminates human rights, while others believe criminals/inmates deserve it. The legalized punishment is a form of violence, rather than a solution to it. The death penalty deserves to be illegal and abolished all around the country.

  1. https://www.amnesty.org/en/what-we-do/death-penalty/

Background: This article explains when the death penalty started and went into effect in states in the U.S It also explains the type of executions states perform during the punishments.

This article will be useful, when defining what the death penalty is and what states do perform these punishments and what don’t. It will also help explain what type of punishments state’s use.

2. http://www.deathpenaltyinfo.org/states-and-without-death-penalty

Background: This map of the country, shows what states allow the death penalty and what don’t. It shows the name and year the state abolished the penalty.

The information the map gave will be useful when explaining the different states that allow and not allow the death penalty. It will create a better understanding, when including the year the state officially abolished the punishment.

3. http://www.deathpenaltyinfo.org/methods-execution

Background: This article gives information on what type of methods of execution states perform. It shows dates and states that authorize methods like, lethal injection, electrocution, and gas chamber.

This source gives more facts on  methods and states that use certain punishment, which will better my paper in explaining the type of executions state use.

4. http://marchforabolition.org

Background:  This discusses the 16th annual March to abolish the Death Penalty in Austin, Texas, which is coming up this month. It will be held on October 24th and is expected to have more than 500 people march.

This site will be useful to my writing because it helps explain why some people want to make it illegal in their state. It will better my explaining on the differences people have on keeping the death penalty legal or illegal.

5. http://www.amnesty.org.au/adp/comments/32961/

Background: This article explains 5 reasons, why the death penalty should be allowed. It tells readers that, we need to be “tough” on crime and these inmates deserve to deal with the consequences.

This source will be used to show the opposing side of why the death penalty should be illegal. It will help show reasons why other people believe these punishments should be allowed to inmates.

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3 Responses to Proposal+5 – tpaz1

  1. tpaz1 says:

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  2. davidbdale says:

    Hey, tpaz.
    Your Proposal paragraph does not make much of an argument. It does declare itself eventually as opposed to the death penalty, but none of the preliminary sentences prepares readers for that conclusion. The better paragraph would start from the first words to advance your argument, or at the very least, declare your affiliation. Don’t deceive yourself that readers will stay with you for even one paragraph if you fail to engage them from the start.

    Where would you bail?
    1. The death penalty is legal in many states today, leaving only a small number illegal.
    —Is there any argument in that sentence that would compel you to read the second sentence? (By the way, is it true? I think the number of states that conduct executions is fewer than half.)
    —Suppose instead you said: Too many states execute their own citizens. You would engage your readers in an argument from the first few words.

    2. The death penalty is a form of legalized unusual punishment, which includes executions such as lethal injections, firing squad, electrocution, and gas chambers.
    —Suppose instead you said: The methods states employ to murder their own citizens differ only in the degree of brutality they inflict: death by asphyxiation, death from multiple bullet wounds, death from electrocution, death from overdose of lethal drugs.

    See what I’m getting at?
    Do you find this useful, tpaz? Reply, please.

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