E05: Mechanical Trouble

that/which

PTSD was once thought of as an illness which only afflicted veterans returning from war.

PTSD was once thought of as an illness, that was true until early in the 21st century.

who/whom

This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, whom has PTSD.

2nd person

When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

PTSD is something that you usually hear about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article you can.

Needless it

When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

unclear antecedent

One example is the time Katie yelled at and attacked an elderly lady because she got angry and lost control.

an extra that

Mclelland claims that because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma that she has developed her own case of PTSD.

Title Punctuation

The article, Is PTSD Contagious? by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

Possessive apostrophes

Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts other’s needs before her own.

Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need other’s support.

This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warrior’s skills.

Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the reader’s.

Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

After Calebs services were over, he developed PTSD.

Pronoun disagreement

Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like they’re experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all

Commas and Quotes

In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?”, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious“.

“Hyperawareness”, “hypervigilance”, and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?”, written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

due to

Mclelland claims that due to Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

misplaced modifier

After returning home, some of his symptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan.

In-Class Exercise

Copy and paste the problematic sentences into the Reply field below and correct them.

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  1. That/which
    You’ve got your commas wrong in both cases.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom
    Would you say “them are noticing” or “they are noticing”? That’s a strong clue.

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, whom are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person
    You got rid of the “you.” Now can you eliminate that horrible “it” that makes no sense?

    When we see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something that we usually hear about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article we can.

    Needless it. This time you left in the banned “you.” For further improvement, can you avoid the needless repetition of “episode”?

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, the episodes begins to harm her safety and well being.

    unclear antecedent
    Technically correct. Can you revise again to make a more elegant sentence?

    One example is the time Katie yelled at and attacked an elderly lady because Katie got angry and lost control.

    an extra that
    Good.

    Mclelland claims that because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation
    Not quite. There’s a comma missing.

    The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes
    You’re making singular possessives instead of plural possessives. Those others are always more than one person, don’t you think?

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts other’s needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need other’s support.

    One of these warriors is singular, one is plural, so one of your choices is correct.
    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warrior’s skills.

    The reader’s what? Why should reader be possessive?
    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the reader’s.

    Nope. Brannan Vines should be possessive.
    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    Nope. Caleb should be possessive.
    After Calebs services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement
    Nope. The singular “someone” doesn’t match the plural “they.”

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like they’re experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    Same problem here.
    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes
    Keep working. You apparently haven’t gotten this far.

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?”, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious“.

    “Hyperawareness”, “hypervigilance”, and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?”, written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that due to Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    After returning home, some of his symptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan.

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  2. thirdlady226 says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When a girl suffers through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is a condition that can affect someone who goes through a traumatic experience or a soldier coming home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article, both of these are possible.

    Needless it

    When a girl suffers through the same episodes as her father does, her safety and well being are in danger.

    Unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie got angry and lost control, and attacked an elderly lady as a result.

    An extra that

    McClelland claims that because of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others’ needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need others’ support.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warriors’ skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warriors’ skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers.

    McClelland claims that Brannan Vines’ husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like he is experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress his symptoms or not show any at all, his PTSD would not be transferred at all.

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious.”

    “Hyperawareness,” “hypervigilance,” and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning,” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?,” written by Mac McClelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that because of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    Caleb’s PTSD symptoms began to affect his wife after he returned home.

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  3. fromcasablanca says:

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    E05: Mechanical Trouble
    Posted on September 25, 2015 by davidbdale
    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, whom are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When a girl is suffering through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something that we usually hear about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article we can.

    Needless it

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, this begins to harm her safety and well being.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie yelled at and attacked an elderly lady because Katie got angry and lost control.

    an extra that

    Mclelland claims because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma that she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, PTSD is Contagious by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts the needs of others’ before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need others’ support.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively skills of warriors.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers’.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines’s husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make a person with PTSD feel like their experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a victim of PTSD who could suppress the symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious.”

    Hyperawareness, hypervigilance, and adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?,” written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that because of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    Some of his symptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan, after he returned home.

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  4. bj112295 says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When seeing a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something that when hearing about it usually refers to someone that goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article it is possible.

    Needless it

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, her safety and well being, begin to become of harm to her.

    unclear antecedent

    An example is the time Katie screamed at an elderly lady and attacked her, because she got angry and lost control.

    an extra that

    Mclelland claims that because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring selfless woman, who puts other’s needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need other peoples support.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has warrior skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warrior’s skills.

    Caleb has an opinion of others opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers.
    ————————————————————————————————- Unfinished Below
    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Calebs services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like they’re experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?”, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious“.

    “Hyperawareness”, “hypervigilance”, and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?”, written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that due to Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    After returning home, some of his symptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan.

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  5. dt2018 says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, whom has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something that you usually hear about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article someone can.

    Needless it

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, they begin to harm her safety and well being.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie yelled at and attacked an elderly lady because she got angry and lost control.

    an extra that

    Mclelland claims that because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, ‘Is PTSD Contagious?’ by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need others’ support.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warriors skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warriors skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines’ husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like they’re experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?”, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious“.

    “Hyperawareness”, “hypervigilance”, and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?”, written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that due to Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    After returning home, some of his symptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan.

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  6. sixfortyfive645 says:

    that/which

    -PTSD was once thought of as illness, that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    -PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    -This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person

    -When a girl is seen suffering through the same episodes as her father, it begins to harm her safety and well-being.

    -PTSD is something that is usually heard about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

    -Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article it can be done.

    Needless it

    -When a girl is seen suffering through the same episodes as her father, her safety and well-being are harmed.

    unclear antecedent

    -One example is the time Brannan got angry and lost control, yelling at and attacking an elderly lady.

    an extra that

    -Mclelland claims that because of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    -The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    -Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others’ needs before her own.

    -Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need others support.

    -This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warriors’ skills.

    -Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Calebs services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like they’re experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?”, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious“.

    “Hyperawareness”, “hypervigilance”, and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?”, written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that due to Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    After returning home, some of his symptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan.

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  7. bigfoot9 says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness which only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, that was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, whom are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When someone sees a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something that a person usually hear about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article a person can.

    Needless it

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, the same episodes begin to harm her safety and well being.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie yelled at and attacked an elderly lady because Katie got angry and lost control.

    an extra that

    Mclelland claims that because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others’ needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need other’s support.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warriors’ skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers’.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like they’re experiencing a traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious“.

    “Hyperawareness”, “hypervigilance”, and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?”, written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that due to Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    some of his symptoms of PTSD, after returning home, started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan.

    REVISE

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  8. cswilliams15 says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, whom are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father.

    2nd person

    When a girl is suffers through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can people catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article it is possible.

    Needless it

    When a girl suffers through the same episodes as her father does, the episodes begin to harm her safety and well being.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie yelled at and attacked an elderly lady because she got angry and lost control.

    an extra that

    Mclelland claims because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need others’ support.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warrior’s skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines’ husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Calebs’ services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like he or she is experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there was a PTSD victim who could suppress his or her symptoms or not show any at all, his or her’s PTSD would not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?”, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be contagious.

    Hyperawareness, hypervigilance and adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning are all skills not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?” written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that beacuse of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    After returning home, some of Caleb’s symptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan.

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  9. dancingueen says:

    E05: Mechanical Trouble
    Posted on September 25, 2015 by davidbdale
    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, they of which are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, whom has PTSD.

    2nd person

    seeing a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something that can usually be heard about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article it can happen.

    Needless it

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, this begins to harm her safety and well being.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie got angry and lost control and yelled at and attacked an elderly lady.

    an extra that

    Mclelland claims because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, Is PTSD Contagious? by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need support.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warriors skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warriors skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the reader’s.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Calebs services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like they’re experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article “Is PTSD Contagious”?, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious“.

    “Hyperawareness”, “hypervigilance”, and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?”, written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that due to Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    After returning home, some of his symptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan.

    In-Class Exercise

    Copy and paste the problematic sentences into the Reply field below and correct them.

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  10. abcdefg577 says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines. They are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When a girl suffers through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something that is usually heard about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider returns from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article we can.

    Needless it

    When a girl suffers through the same episodes as her father does, her safety and well being begin to be harmed.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie got angry, lost control, yelled at and attacked an elderly woman.

    an extra that

    Mclelland claims that because of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others’ needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need the support of others.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has warriors’ skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warriors’ skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines’s husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make a PTSD sufferer feel like they’re experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were PTSD victims who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all.

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious.”

    “Hyperawareness,” “hypervigilance,” and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?,” written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that because of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    After returning home, Caleb’s symptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan.

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  11. mymomshouldhavenamedmegrace says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness which only afflicted veterans returning from war.
    Revised – PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only affected veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, that was true until early in the 21st century.
    Revised – PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until the early 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, whom has PTSD.
    Revised – This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father who has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.
    Revised – When a girl is seen suffering through the same episodes as her father, it is harmful to her safety and her well-being.

    PTSD is something that you usually hear about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.
    Revised – PTSD is something that is generally heard of after someone goes through a traumatic experience, such as soldier returning home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article you can.
    Revised – Can something without germs be contagious? Can behaviors be caught and mirror those of others? According to this article, it is possible.

    Needless it

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.
    Revised – When a girl is seen suffering through the same episodes as her father, her safety and well being are compromised.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie yelled at and attacked an elderly lady because she got angry and lost control.
    Revised – One example would be when Brannan became angry and lost control, yelling at and attacking an elderly lady.

    an extra that

    McClelland claims that because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma that she has developed her own case of PTSD.
    Revised – Mclelland claims that because of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, Is PTSD Contagious? by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.
    Revised – The article “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts other’s needs before her own.
    Revised – Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman who puts the needs of others before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need other’s support.
    Revised – Vines, along with many others, are desperately searching for help and the support of others.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warrior’s skills.
    Revised – The statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however, the ones listed are not exclusively warriors skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the reader’s.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Calebs services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like they’re experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?”, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious“.

    “Hyperawareness”, “hypervigilance”, and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?”, written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that due to Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    After returning home, some of his symptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan.

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  12. luckyleprechaun1 says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until the early 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When a girl suffers through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something one usually hears about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider comes home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article, we can.

    Needless it

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie lost control and yelled at an elderly lady.

    an extra that

    Mclelland claims that because of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others’ needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need others’ support.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warrior’s skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the reader’s.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Calebs services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD experience a traumatic event all over again.

    If a PTSD victim could suppress their symptoms, the PTSD would be completely noncontagious.

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?”, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious“.

    “Hyperawareness”, “hypervigilance”, and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?”, written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that because of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    After returning home, some of his symptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan.

    not finished…

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  13. hiralp365 says:

    That/which
    It was once believed only veterans who were returning from war were afflicted with PTSD.
    Until early 21st century, PTSD was once thought of as an illness.

    Who/Whom
    The family of Brannan and Caleb Vines noticed traits of PTSD in their daughter, similarly to what her father exhibited.

    2nd person
    When a girl suffers from same episode as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something most commonly heard by people when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a soldier coming home from war

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? It’s possible according to this article

    Needless it
    when a girl suffers from same episode as her father does, her safety and well being is harmed.

    unclear antecedent
    One example of the time when Katie lost her control, was when she attacked and yelled at the elderly lady in anger.

    an extra that
    Mclelland claims Branna developed her own case of PTSD due to exposure of Caleb’s great deal trauma.

    Title Punctuation
    The article “Is PTSD contagious?,” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes
    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others’ needs before her own.
    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need others’ support.
    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warriors’ skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warriors’ skills.
    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers’.
    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vine’s husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.
    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    pronoun disagreements
    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make a persom with PTSD feel like they’re experiencing that traumatic event all over again.
    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress the symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all.

    commas and quotes
    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious.”

    “Hyperawareness”, “hypervigilance”, “adrenaline’, and “sharp quick-scanning”, are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    due to
    Mclelland claims, Brannan acquires her own case of PTSD from great deal of exposure from caleb’s trauma.

    misplaced modifier
    Some of his symptoms of PTSD started to rub on to his wife after he returned home.

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  14. E05: Mechanical Trouble

    That/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, whom are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When we see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something that we usually hear about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article we can.

    Needless it

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, the episodes begins to harm her safety and well being.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie yelled at and attacked an elderly lady because Katie got angry and lost control.

    an extra that

    Mclelland claims that because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others’ needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need others’ support.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warrior skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the reader’s.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines’ husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Calebs’ services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like he experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress his symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD his not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious.“

    “Hyperawareness,” “hypervigilance,” and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?,” written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    Some of his symptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan.

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  15. alivewit55 says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When a girl suffer’s through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something that is often heard about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a soldier coming home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article it is possible.

    Needless it

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, the suffering begins to harm her safety and well being.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie yelled at and attacked an elderly lady because Katie simply got angry and lost control.

    an extra that

    McClelland claims that Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma caused her to develop her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others’ needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need other’s support.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warriors’ skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines’s husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like he/she is experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there was a PTSD victim who could suppress his/her symptoms or not show any at all, his/her PTSD would not be transferred at all.

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article “Is PTSD Contagious?”, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious.”

    “Hyperawareness,” “hypervigilance,” and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?” written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma has caused her to develop her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    After Caleb returned home, some of his symptoms of PTSD began to rub off onto his wife Brannan.

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  16. xchuki says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, whom are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When we see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something that we usually hear about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article we can.

    Needless it

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, they begin to harm her safety and well being.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie got angry, lost control, yelled at and attacked an elderly lady.

    an extra that

    Mclelland claims that because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others’ needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need others’ support.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however they are not .
    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers’.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines’s husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Calebs’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make people with PTSD feel like they are experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a PTSD victims who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article “Is PTSD Contagious?”, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious”.

    “Hyperawareness,” “hypervigilance”, and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?”written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma has caused her to develop her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    Some of his symptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan, after he returned home.

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  17. douglasadams525 says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When a girl suffers through the same episodes as her father does, her safety and well being come to harm.

    PTSD is something that is usually heard of after a traumatic experience is undergone, or after a solider returns home from war.

    Is it possible for something without germs to be contagious? Can behaviors be caught and mirrored? According to this article, it is and they can.

    Needless it

    When a girl suffers through the same episodes as her father does, her safety and well being begin to be harmed.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie got angry and lost control, ultimately yelling at and attacking an elderly lady.

    an extra that

    Mclelland claims that because of her exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, Brannan has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article titled, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others’ needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help, and need the support of others.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warrior’s skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers.

    Mclelland claims that Caleb Vines, Brannan Vines’ husband, has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make the sufferer experience a traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all.

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious.“

    “Hyperawareness,” “hypervigilance,” and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?,” written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that because of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

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  18. That/which:

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    Who/Whom:

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb vines, whom are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd Person:

    When a girl suffers through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well-being.

    PTSD is something typically heard about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article, yes.

    Needless it:

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, such behavior may begin to harm her safety and well being.

    Unclear Antecedent:

    One example is the time Katie, because she got angry and lost control, yelled at and attacked an elderly lady

    An extra that:

    Mclelland claims that because of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation:

    The article “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes:

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring selfless woman, who puts others’ needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and needs other’s support.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warriors’ skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can be used to gain sympathy from the readers.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines’ husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun Disagreement:

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make anyone with PTSD feel like they’re experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were PTSD victims who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all.

    Commas and Quotes:

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” the author proposed that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious.”

    “Hyperawareness,” “hypervigilance,” and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?,” written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    Due to:

    Mclelland claims that in effect of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Misplaced modifier:

    Upon returning home, some of his symptoms of PTSD began to rub off onto his wife Brannan.

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  19. americangods01 says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When a girl suffers through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something that is usually heard about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

    Can things without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article they can.

    Needless it

    When a girl suffers through the same episodes as her father does, her safety and well being are harmed.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie got angry and lost control by yelling and attacking an elderly lady.

    an extra that

    Mclelland claims that because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts other’s needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need other’s support.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warrior’s skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the reader’s.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Calebs services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like he or she is experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress his or her symptoms or not show any at all, his or her PTSD would not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious.“

    “Hyperawareness,” “hypervigilance,” and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?”, written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that because of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    NOT FINSIHED

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  20. marinebio18 says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, whom has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When a girl suffers through the same episodes as her father does, her safety and well being could be harmed.

    PTSD is something that people usually hear about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can humans catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article it is possible.

    Needless it

    suffer through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie yelled at and attacked an elderly lady because she got angry and lost control.

    an extra that

    Mclelland claims Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma that she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts other’s needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need other’s support.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warrior’s skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the reader’s.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines’ husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.
    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like they’re experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?”, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious“.

    “Hyperawareness”, “hypervigilance”, and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?”, written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that due to Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    After Caleb returned home, some of his symptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan.

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  21. crossanlogan says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness which only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness; that was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing in their daughter Katie some behaviors consistent with PTSD, a condition with which her father has been diagnosed.

    2nd person

    When a girl suffers through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something that is usually diagnosed when someone goes through a traumatic experience or comes home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article it is possible.

    Needless it

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, that suffering begins to harm her safety and well being.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie, angry and out of control, yelled at and attacked an elderly lady.

    an extra that

    Mclelland claims that because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts the needs of others before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need others’ support.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warriors’ skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines’ husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like he or she is experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress his or her symptoms or not show any at all, his or her PTSD would not be transferred at all.

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious.“

    “Hyperawareness,” “hypervigilance,” and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?,” written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma has contributed to Brannan’s own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    After returning home, some of Caleb’s PTSD symptoms started rubbing off onto Brannan, Caleb’s wife.

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  22. twofoursixohtwo says:

    that/which
    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only afflicted veterans returning from war.
    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom
    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person
    When a girl suffers through the same episodes as her father does, her safety and well being are compromised.
    PTSD is something one usually hear about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.
    Can something without germs be contagious? Can a person catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article, it’s possible.

    Needless it
    When a girl suffers through the same episodes as her father does, her safety and well being are compromised.

    unclear antecedent
    For example, on one occasion Katie got angry and lost control, and as a result she yelled at and attacked an elderly lady.

    an extra that
    Mclelland claims because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation
    The Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes
    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others’ needs before her own.
    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need others’ support.
    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warrior’s skills.
    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers.
    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines’ husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.
    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement
    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like he or she is experiencing that traumatic event all over again.
    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress symptoms or not show any at all, his or her PTSD would not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes
    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.
    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be contagious.
    “Hyperawareness”, “hypervigilance”, and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.
    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?,” written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to
    Mclelland claims due to Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier
    After Caleb returned home, some of his symptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan.

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  23. sixfortyfive645 says:

    Completed version:
    that/which

    -PTSD was once thought of as illness, that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    -PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    -This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person

    -When a girl is seen suffering through the same episodes as her father, it begins to harm her safety and well-being.

    -PTSD is something that is usually heard about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

    -Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article it can be done.

    Needless it

    -When a girl is seen suffering through the same episodes as her father, her safety and well-being are harmed.

    unclear antecedent

    -One example is the time Brannan got angry and lost control, yelling at and attacking an elderly lady.

    an extra that

    -Mclelland claims that because of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    -The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    -Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others’ needs before her own.

    -Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need others support.

    -This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warriors’ skills.

    -Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers.

    -Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines’ husband, Caleb Vines, has passed on his PTSD to her.

    -After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    -Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make a PTSD sufferer experience that traumatic event all over again.

    -If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred.

    Commas and Quotes

    -In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    -Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious.“

    -“Hyperawareness,” “hypervigilance,” and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    -In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?,” written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    -Mclelland claims that because of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    -Some of his PTSD symptoms started to rub off onto his wife, Brannan, after he returned home.

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  24. haveanelephantasticday says:

    E05: Mechanical Trouble

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, whom are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something that people usually hear about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article it’s possible.

    Needless it

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, her safety and well being are being harmed.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie got angry,lost control, and yelled at an elderly lady.

    an extra that

    Mclelland claims that because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others’ needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need support from one another.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warrior skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines’ husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like he or she is experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress his or her symptoms or not show any at all, PTSD would not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    However, some parts of the article may offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious“.

    “Hyperawareness, “hypervigilance, and adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    The article “Is PTSD Contagious?,” by Mac Mclelland, claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that because Brannan was exposed to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    Some symptoms of his PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan when he returned home.

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  25. wildcuttlefish says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness which only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, that was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, whom has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something that you usually hear about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Could you catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article you can.

    Needless it

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, she begins to harm her safety and well being.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie got angry and lost control, so she yelled and attacked an elderly lady.

    an extra that

    Mclelland claims that Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others’ needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need other’s support.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warriors’ skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the reader’s.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vine’s husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like he/she is experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, he/she’s PTSD would not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article “Is PTSD Contagious?”, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious“.

    “Hyperawareness,” “hypervigilance,” and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?” written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that due to Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    After returning home, his wife Brannan started to show symptons of his PTSD.

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  26. marinebio18 says:

    that/which
    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only afflicted veterans returning from war.
    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom
    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, whom are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person
    When a girl suffers through the same episodes as her father does, her safety and well being could be harmed.
    PTSD is something that people usually hear about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider comes home from war.
    Can something without germs be contagious? Can humans catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article it is possible.

    Needless it
    When a girl suffers through the same episodes as her father does, her actions begin to harm her safety and well being.

    unclear antecedent
    One example is the time Katie got angry and lost control, which resulted in yelling at and attacked an elderly lady.
    an extra that
    Mclelland claims Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, resulted in developing her own case of PTSD.
    Title Punctuation
    The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes
    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts other’s needs before her own.
    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need other’s support.
    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warrior skills.
    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the reader.
    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines’ husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.
    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement
    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make a person with PTSD feel like he or she is experiencing that traumatic event all over again.
    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress the symptoms or not show any at all, the PTSD would not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes
    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?,” the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.
    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious”.
    Hyperawareness, hypervigilance, and adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.
    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?,” written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to
    Mclelland claims that Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, caused the development of her own case of PTSD.
    misplaced modifier
    After Caleb returned home, some of his symptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan.

    REVISED

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  27. jcirrs says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, whom are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When we see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something that we usually hear about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article we can.

    Needless it

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, they begin to harm her safety and well being.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie got angry and lost control by yelling and attacking an elderly lady.
    an extra that

    Mclelland claims that because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring selfless woman, who puts others’ needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need other’s support.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warriors’ skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can be used to gain sympathy from the readers.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines’ husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like he or she experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress his or her symptoms or not show any at all, his or her PTSD would not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article “Is PTSD Contagious?,” the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious”.

    “Hyperawareness,” “hypervigilance,” and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?,” written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims because of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    After getting home, some of his symptoms of PTSD began rubbing off onto his wife Brannan.

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    • davidbdale says:

      who/whom

      This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, whom are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.
      (Would you say “them are noticing” or “they are noticing”?)

      2nd person + Needless it

      1. When we see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.
      2. When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, they begin to harm her safety and well being.
      (Can you make both changes together? Then ask yourself, does the our seeing harm her safety? Or do the episodes harm her safety? Rephrase the sentence to fix this ambiguity.)

      PTSD is something that we usually hear about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.
      (This sentence says that some goes through a soldier.)

      Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need other’s support.
      (Nope. Those others are plural.)

      Pronoun disagreement

      Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like he or she experiencing that traumatic event all over again.
      (Good. Now can you eliminate the “he or she”?)

      If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress his or her symptoms or not show any at all, his or her PTSD would not be transferred at all.
      (Again?)

      Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious”.
      (ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS the period goes inside the quotes.)

      After getting home, some of his symptoms of PTSD began rubbing off onto his wife Brannan.
      (Nope. This sentence says that his symptoms came home.)

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  28. mymomshouldhavenamedmegrace says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness which only afflicted veterans returning from war.
    Revised – PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only affected veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, that was true until early in the 21st century.
    Revised – PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until the early 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, whom has PTSD.
    Revised – This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father who has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.
    Revised – When a girl is seen suffering through the same episodes as her father, it is harmful to her safety and her well-being.

    PTSD is something that you usually hear about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.
    Revised – PTSD is something that is generally heard of after someone goes through a traumatic experience, such as soldier returning home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article you can.
    Revised – Can something without germs be contagious? Can behaviors be caught and mirror those of others? According to this article, it is possible.

    Needless it

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.
    Revised – When a girl is seen suffering through the same episodes as her father, her safety and well being are compromised.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie yelled at and attacked an elderly lady because she got angry and lost control.
    Revised – One example would be when Brannan became angry and lost control, yelling at and attacking an elderly lady.

    an extra that

    McClelland claims that because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma that she has developed her own case of PTSD.
    Revised – Mclelland claims that because of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, Is PTSD Contagious? by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.
    Revised – The article “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts other’s needs before her own.
    Revised – Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman who puts the needs of others before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need other’s support.
    Revised – Vines, along with many others, are desperately searching for help and the support of others.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warrior’s skills.
    Revised – The statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however, the ones listed are not exclusively warriors skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the reader’s.
    Revised – Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.
    Revised – McClelland claims that Brannan Vines’ husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Calebs services were over, he developed PTSD.
    Revised – After Caleb’s services were over,he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like they’re experiencing that traumatic event all over again.
    Revised – Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback, making someone with PTSD feel like they are experiencing a traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all
    Revised – If a victim of PTSD had the ability to suppress their symptoms, not showing any at all, their PTSD would not be transferable.

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?”, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.
    Revised – In the Mother Jones article “Is PTSD Contagious?”, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious“.
    Revised – Some parts of the article however, offer insight into why PTSD may be contagious.

    “Hyperawareness”, “hypervigilance”, and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.
    Revised – Hyperawareness, hypervigilance, and adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning are all skills not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?”, written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.
    Revised – The article “Is PTSD Contagious?” written by Mac McClelland claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that due to Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.
    Revised – McClelland claims that Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma caused her to develop her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    Some symptoms of his PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan when he returned home.
    Revised – Some symptoms of Caleb’s PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan when he returned home.

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    • davidbdale says:

      Revised – This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father who has PTSD.
      (As punctuated here, this sentence says Katie has more than one father.)

      Revised – When a girl is seen suffering through the same episodes as her father, her safety and well being are compromised.
      (Suppose she isn’t seen? Is it the seeing, or the episodes, that compromise her safety?)

      Revised – The statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however, the ones listed are not exclusively warriors skills.
      (Nope. That second warrior still needs to be possesive.)

      Revised – Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback, making someone with PTSD feel like they are experiencing a traumatic event all over again.
      (The singular someone cannot be referred to by the plural they.)

      Revised – If a victim of PTSD had the ability to suppress their symptoms, not showing any at all, their PTSD would not be transferable.
      (The singular victim is not their.)

      Revised – In the Mother Jones article “Is PTSD Contagious?”, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.
      (ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS the comma inside the quotes.)

      Revised – Some parts of the article however, offer insight into why PTSD may be contagious.
      (You can’t fix the punctuation by eliminating it. Contagious belongs within quotes.)

      Revised – Hyperawareness, hypervigilance, and adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning are all skills not necessarily related to being a warrior.
      (You can’t fix the punctuation by eliminating it. Put back the quotation marks and separate the items in the series with commas.)

      Revised – The article “Is PTSD Contagious?” written by Mac McClelland claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.
      (Re-insert three useful commas.)

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  29. themildewmuncher7 says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness *that* only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true, until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, who are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When we see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, we see that they begin to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something that is usually encountered when someone goes through a traumatic experience or when a solider comes home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article we can.

    Needless it

    When we see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, we see that they begin to harm her safety and well being.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie yelled at and attacked an elderly lady because Katie got angry and lost control.

    an extra that

    Mclelland claims because of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma that she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?”, by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others’ needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need the support of others.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warriors’ skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines’ husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like they’re experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there was a PTSD victim who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all.

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?”, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious”.

    Hyperawareness, hypervigilance, and adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?”, written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    After returning home, some of his PTSD symptoms started to rub off onto his wife Brannan.

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  30. belldere says:

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, whom are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    When a girl is suffering through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well-being.

    PTSD is something that is usually heard when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a soldier coming home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article, it is possible.

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, the episodes begin to harm her safety and well being.

    One example is the time Katie yelled at and attacked an elderly lady because Katie got angry and lost control.

    McClelland claims that because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts other’s needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need other’s support.

    This statement is assuming the Brannan has a warrior’s skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warrior’s skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion for others’ opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the readers.

    McClelland claims the Brannan Vines’ husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like they’re experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were PTSD victims who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all.

    In the Mother Jones article, “IS PTSD Contagious?,” the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious, hyperawareness, hypervigilance, and adrenaline- sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    “Hyperawareness, hypervigilance, and adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article “Is PTSD Contagious?,” written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    Mclelland claims that due to Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    After returning home, some of his symptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan.

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  31. peachesxo says:

    that/which

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness that only afflicted veterans returning from war.

    PTSD was once thought of as an illness, which was true until early in the 21st century.

    who/whom

    This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, whom are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.

    2nd person

    When we see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, it begins to harm her safety and well being.

    PTSD is something that we usually hear about when someone goes through a traumatic experience or a solider coming home from war.

    Can something without germs be contagious? Can we catch behaviors and mirror others? According to this article we can.

    Needless it

    When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, the episodes begins to harm her safety and well being.

    unclear antecedent

    One example is the time Katie yelled at and attacked an elderly lady because Katie got angry and lost control.

    an extra that

    Mclelland claims that because of Branna’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    Title Punctuation

    The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.

    Possessive apostrophes

    Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others needs before her own.

    Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need others support.

    This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warriors skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warrior’s skills.

    Having Caleb’s opinion of others opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the reader’s.

    Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.

    After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.

    Pronoun disagreement

    Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like they’re experiencing that traumatic event all over again.

    If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all

    Commas and Quotes

    In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?”, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

    Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious“.

    “Hyperawareness”, “hypervigilance”, and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

    In the article, “Is PTSD Contagious?”, written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

    due to

    Mclelland claims that because of Brannan’s exposure to a great deal of Caleb’s trauma, she has developed her own case of PTSD.

    misplaced modifier

    Some of his syptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan after returning home

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    • davidbdale says:

      who/whom

      This condition is visible in the family of Brannan and Caleb Vines, whom are noticing the same traits in their daughter Katie as those exhibited by her father, who has PTSD.
      (Would you say them are noticing, or they are noticing? Does that clue help?)

      Needless it

      When you see a girl suffer through the same episodes as her father does, the episodes begins to harm her safety and well being.
      (This time, can you eliminate the “you” and also fix the number disagreement between “episodes” and “begins”?)

      Title Punctuation

      The article, “Is PTSD Contagious?” by Mac McClelland, explores the dynamics of a troubled family.
      (There’s a comma before the title, so there should be a comma after the title too.)

      Possessive apostrophes

      Brannan Vines is an inspiring, selfless woman, who puts others needs before her own.
      (Nope. You need a plural possessive.)

      Brannan Vines and many others are desperately searching for help and need others support.
      (Nope. Same reason.)

      This statement is assuming that Brannan has a warriors skills, however the ones listed are not exclusively warrior’s skills.
      (Both of these are wrong.)

      Having Caleb’s opinion of others opinions about himself can only be used to gain sympathy from the reader’s.
      (The others are plural and also need to be possessive. The readers aren’t possessive at all.)

      Mclelland claims that Brannan Vines husband Caleb Vines has passed on his PTSD to her.
      (We’re talking about the husband of Brannan Vines. Her husband. That makes Brannan Vines possessive. Are you getting this?)

      After Caleb’s services were over, he developed PTSD.
      (Yep. Just like this.)

      Pronoun disagreement

      Sometimes an event can trigger a flashback and make someone with PTSD feel like they’re experiencing that traumatic event all over again.
      (Your singular someone disagrees with the plural they.)

      If there were a PTSD victim who could suppress their symptoms or not show any at all, their PTSD would not be transferred at all.
      (Again, a victim is singular. Their is plural. They cannot be used together.)

      Commas and Quotes

      (Nothing is right about this section. You’ve missed the essential lesson that commas and periods ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS go inside the quotation marks.)

      In the Mother Jones article, “Is PTSD Contagious?”, the author proposes that the symptoms of PTSD are transferable, specifically from an army veteran to his wife.

      Some parts of the article, however, offer insight into why PTSD may be “contagious“.

      “Hyperawareness”, “hypervigilance”, and “adrenaline-sharp quick-scanning” are all skills, not necessarily related to being a warrior.

      In the article, “Is PTSD Contagious?”, written by Mac Mclelland, she claims that PTSD can be spread to surrounding people.

      misplaced modifier

      Some of his symptoms of PTSD started rubbing off onto his wife Brannan after returning home.
      (Since you haven’t named Caleb, there’s nothing in your sentence to return home except the symptoms. After returning home, the symptoms rubbed off? Nope.)

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